Reading progress update: I've read 6 out of 165 pages.

Existence - Abbi Glines

"So, what class do you have first?" I asked, relaxing for the first time since I'd spotted the dead guy lounging outside on the picnic table staring directly at me.

 

There are so many good ways to deliver that idea. An awkward run-on sentence with no commas and no and's is not one of them.

 

Is there a good way to write "ands?" because I tried several of them and they all looked stupid.

 

My comments looking stupid isn't important, though. What's important that my stupid-looking comments are detailing all the ways in which this book looks stupid.

 

How many times did I use the word "stupid" right there? Too many. Don't be like me, book. Use word variety and intelligent phrasing. Please.