Reading progress update: I've read 27 out of 165 pages.
"Would you PLEASE stop popping up out of nowhere and scaring the bejesus out of me!"
That should have a question mark on the end of it. And please, please start using italics and stop it with all the capitals. Full-blown capitals should only be used rarely, if ever, and then only when the character is screaming their head off. Not for little things like "Oh!" and "Wow!" and "Please!"
Grrrrr.
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